Having looked at the original question and as a result of the consultation the Commission have come up with their own form of words.
The ball is now back in the Secretary of State for Wales's court. For it is Cheryl Gillanr that has the final say. Although she has said she will consult with Carwyn Jones the First Minister, on what happens next. The new wording suggested by the Electoral Commission is:-
It begs the question why do we need a referendum at all. Surely over paid politicians could have taken the decision without bothering the voters. Clearly not.